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Birdie Falling's avatar

"And this is literally as it’s literally meant to be taken." I laughed. Detached, analytical. Just like William.

M. Anne Avera's avatar

What a cool concept!!! I love this.

Odessa Blaine's avatar

Thanks for taking the time to read it. Glad you enjoyed it.

Mina Howell's avatar

This is so awesome oh my gosh

12/10 my kind of read πŸ’•

Odessa Blaine's avatar

Thanks for reading it. 😁

Maryellen Brady πŸ’—πŸ“š's avatar

Omgosh giggling at the squirrel with his tail on fire description, this is so creative.

Odessa Blaine's avatar

Glad it got you laughing 😁🐿️πŸ”₯

Bradley Ramsey's avatar

Your tagline was superb here. I was checking my email between work meetings, and I saw the line about the afterlife being bureaucracy, and I knew I had to click.

I love the premise here and the banality of William's job. There were a ton of great standout lines as well, like the one about shell cases being ankle-deep, and don't even get me started on that delightfully grotesque finale. Precisely the jolt of creativity I needed after a long meeting, haha.

Odessa Blaine's avatar

Glad you enjoyed it! This was an old flash fiction I dusted off. I actually have notes to turn this into an entire novel.